스피킹&오픽 첨삭게시판 토익스피킹&OPIc 연습을 해보고 내가 만든 답안에 대한 의견을 들어보는 게시판 입니다.
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조회 117
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- 2022.10.04
My name is Bum Kim.I just turned 26 years old last month. I live in Gwanak-gu, Seoul city with my parents.
I'm looking for a job as an engineer. Because my major was mechanical design in university, and I am trying to study hard these days. And I'm pretty good at math and science. For these reasons, I want to be a good engineer.
In my free time, I tend to play computer games or sing a song in my bedroom. When I do these, I feel happy and comfortable. My personality is a little introverted. I like listening to people than talking myself. Anyway, I strive to some certificates and take an english test such as OPIc test. Sometimes, I'm frustrated and exhuasted. But I will do my best to become a great engineer.'
I'm looking for a job as an engineer. Because my major was mechanical design in university, and I am trying to study hard these days. And I'm pretty good at math and science. For these reasons, I want to be a good engineer.
In my free time, I tend to play computer games or sing a song in my bedroom. When I do these, I feel happy and comfortable. My personality is a little introverted. I like listening to people than talking myself. Anyway, I strive to some certificates and take an english test such as OPIc test. Sometimes, I'm frustrated and exhuasted. But I will do my best to become a great engineer.'
오픽이 처음이라 어떤식으로 해야 짜임새 있는지 잘 모르겠어요..
특히 engineer 가 3번 이상 들어가는데, 감점 요인일까요?
어색하고 불필요한 문장이나 문맥, 비문이 많은 거 같은데 지적해주시면 정말 감사드려요.
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| 5671 |
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첨삭지기 | 95 | 2022.10.15 |
| 5670 | [스피킹] 스피킹 첨삭 | Off | 80 | 2022.10.15 |
| 5669 |
[스피킹] RE:스피킹 첨삭
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첨삭지기 | 87 | 2022.10.15 |
| 5668 | [스피킹] 실전 토스 첨삭 | iffyiffy | 91 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5667 |
[스피킹] RE:실전 토스 첨삭
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첨삭지기 | 88 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5666 | [스피킹] 실전 토스 9/9 | iffyiffy | 86 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5665 |
[스피킹] RE:실전 토스 9/9
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첨삭지기 | 88 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5664 | [OPIc] 첨삭 오픽 opic | 브랜드뉴 | 97 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5663 |
[OPIc] RE:첨삭 오픽 opic
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첨삭지기 | 107 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5662 | [OPIc] 첨삭 오픽opic | 브랜드뉴 | 96 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5661 |
[OPIc] RE:첨삭 오픽opic
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첨삭지기 | 87 | 2022.10.14 |
| 5660 | [스피킹] 스피킹 첨삭 | On | 90 | 2022.10.13 |
| 5659 |
[스피킹] RE:스피킹 첨삭
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첨삭지기 | 82 | 2022.10.13 |
| 5658 | [스피킹] 스피킹 첨삭 요청 | On | 94 | 2022.10.13 |
| 5657 |
[스피킹] RE:스피킹 첨삭 요청
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첨삭지기 | 103 | 2022.10.13 |
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| 5655 |
[OPIc] RE:오픽 첨삭02
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첨삭지기 | 95 | 2022.10.13 |
| 5654 | [OPIc] 오픽 첨삭01 | homie | 99 | 2022.10.13 |
| 5653 |
[OPIc] RE:오픽 첨삭01
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첨삭지기 | 98 | 2022.10.13 |
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