My name is Bum Kim. I just turned 26 years old last month. I live in Gwanak-gu, Seoul city with my parents.

I'm looking for a job as an engineer. Because my major was mechanical design in university, and I am trying to study hard these days. And I'm pretty good at math and science. For these reasons, I want to be a good engineer.

In my free time, I (tend to) play computer games or sing a song in my bedroom. When I do these, I feel happy and comfortable. My personality is a little introverted[또는 As for my personality, I’m an introvert]. I like listening to people than talking myself. Anyway, I strive to get some certificates and take an english test such as OPIc test.

[또는, Anyway, I’m spending my time these days on studying for Opic and other certificates that are required for getting a job]

(It’s not easy and) Sometimes, I'm I get frustrated and exhausted[또는 lose motivation]. But I will do my best to become a great engineer.'

오픽이 처음이라 어떤식으로 해야 짜임새 있는지 잘 모르겠어요..

-> 충분히 좋습니다.

특히 engineer 가 3번 이상 들어가는데, 감점 요인일까요?

-> 아닙니다.

어색하고 불필요한 문장이나 문맥, 비문이 많은 거 같은데 지적해주시면 정말 감사드려요.

-> 오픽은 토익 스피킹보다 일상적인 대화가 많이 들어가 비교적 자유도가 높습니다. 준비하신 대로 자신감 있게만 하신다면 문제 없을 것 같네요.